NCE4-Lesson4仿写练习

仿写结果

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->bundles. Vera->s special->curious ability->talent soon->was catches->brought to the attention->notice of a scientific research institution->institute in the town of UIyanovsk, near her->where home->she lives, and in Ulyanovsk. On->April she was given April, a series of tests by a special commission of Russia->the Health->Ministry Department->of conducts->Health a->of series->the of->Russian Federal tests->Republic. During these tests, -> she could->was able to read a newspaper through an opaque screen. What’s more->and, stranger surprising is->still, only->by touched->moving the->her lotto->elbow with->over her->a child’s game of Lotto elbow, she could->was name->able out->to describe the numbers->figures and colors->colours of->printed the->on card. There->it; and, in was->an one->other time->instance, dressed->wearing with long stocks->stockings and slippers, still->to she->make was->out able->with to->her find out->foot the -> outlines and colours of a picture hidden under the->a carpet. Other experiments -> showed that her keens->knees and shoulders have->had the->a same->similar abilities->sensitivity. Vera was blindfold during->During all these tests experiments. She->Vera would->was lose->blindfold; and, indeed, except her->when special->blindfold ability->she if->lacked she->the ability was->to not->perceive blindfold. This->things is->with true->her indeed->skin. It->lt was also found that even though->although she -> could tell->perceive things with her fingers, the surprising->this function->ability will->ceased lose->the if->moment her fingers ->hands were wet.
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总结

  • Several cases have been reported in Russia recently of people who can read and detect colours with their fingers, and even see through solid and walls.

被动语态一下子被there be句型好了很多很多

同时solid walls也比heavy好。

  • One case concerns and eleven-year-old schoolgirl,Vera Petrova, who has normal vision but who can also perceive things with different parts of her skin, and through solid walls.

一个从句很好的节省了空间,同时比there be更加专业。

has normal vision but who can also perceive things with different parts of her skin normal vision 比sight好

  • Suddenly she asked her father why he kept so many old newspapers locked away there, and even described the way they were done up in bundles.

be done up in bundles 成捆放置的,写得非常好和形象。这个句子也充满了现场感觉。Suddenly一下把人给纠结起来了,而不是把suddenly放在后面慢热。

  •  Vera’s curious talent was brought to the notice of a scientific research institute in the town of Ulyanovsk, near where she lives, and in April she was given a series of tests by a special commission of the Ministry of Health of the Russian Federal Republic.

curious talent 而不是 ability 的说法更加切合语境,同时brought to the notice of 的说法也很专业。

be given a series of tests by special commission of the Ministry of Health of teh Russian Federal Republic 也很专业。这个可以用在很多表示大家需要注意的地方。

  • During these tests she was able to read a newspaper through an opaque screen and, stranger still, by moving her elbow over a child’s game of Lotto she was able to describe the figures and colours printed on it; and, in another instance, wearing stockings and slippers, to make out with her foot the outlines and colours of a picture hidden under a carpet.

through a opaque screen 穿过不透明的屏幕

stranger still 写得特别精彩,这比普通的什么what’s more之类的更加值得学习。

in another instance 也是一个换一种角度描述事物的方法。

同时值得学习的是,这个句子很长但是通过适当的句式变换可以说是行云流水一点也不卡顿。同时注意第二个分局,也就是分号后的句子省略了主语,可以说时信手拈来,举重若轻。

  • Other experiments showed that her knees and shoulders had a similar sensitivity

注意这里的词汇变化本来都是能力,但是这里使用sensitivity这样的表达更加地合理和高效,同时避免使得整个文章都使用ability。

  • During all these tests Vera was blindfold; and, indeed, except when blindfold she lacked the ability to perceive things with her skin.

这个句子就是学习怎么把句子写长的,不用两个句子的长度,一个except when blindfold就可以表达出作者的全部意思。 perceive things with her skin 也是detect的一个同义改写。

  • It was also found that although she could perceive things with her fingers this ability ceased the moment her hands were wet.

this ability ceased the moment XXXX 当什么什么时怎么怎么样的另一种表达。

背诵

In the Soviet Union several cases have been reported recently of people who can read and detect colours with their fingers, and even see through solid doors and walls. One case concerns an ‘eleven-year-old schoolgirl, Vera Petrova, who has normal vision but who can also perceive things with different parts of her skin, and through solid walls. This ability was first noticed by her father. One day she came into his office and happened to put her hands on the door of a locked safe. Suddenly she asked her father why he kept so many old newspapers locked away there, and even described the way they were done up in bundles. Veras curious talent was brought to the notice of a scientific research institute in the town of UIyanovsk, near where she lives, and in April she was given a series of tests by a special commission of the Ministry of Health of the Russian Federal Republic. During these tests she was able to read a newspaper through an opaque screen and, stranger still, by moving her elbow over a child’s game of Lotto she was able to describe the figures and colours printed on it; and, in an other instance, wearing stockings and slippers, to make out with her foot the outlines and colours of a picture hidden under a carpet. Other experiments showed that her knees and shoulders had a similar sensitivity. During all these tests Vera was blindfold; and, indeed, except when blindfold she lacked the ability to perceive things with her skin. lt was also found that although she could perceive things with her fingers this ability ceased the moment her hands were wet.

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