NCE4-Lesson2仿写练习

仿写结果

总体结果:

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You->Why, you may wonder why->, should spiders are->be our friends. -> ? Because they can destroy so many pets->insects, and including->insects include some are->of the great->greatest enemies for->of the human beings->race. Without the protection of these insect-eating animals, insects->Insects would make it impossible for us to live on->in the earth: ->world; they will->woulddevour eat->all up out->our crops and kill our crowds. We->flocks should->and be->herds, if thankful->it to->were not for the protectionwe get those->from insect-eating animals. We owe a lot to the birds and beasts, however, even the->who sum->eatinsects of->but insects->all birds->of and->them beats->put kill->together is->kill only a small part->fraction of that->the of->number the->destroyedby spiders. Besides->Moreover, unlike some of the other insect-eating animals->eaters, spiders do->never not->dothe hurt->least our->harm propriety->to any->us more.

Many
->or people->our think->belongings.Spiders spiders->are are->not insects, however, they->as are->many people not->think, spiders->nor have->even no->nearly relationship->related with->to insects. Almost->them.One at->can a->tell glance, people->the can->difference find->almost the->at differences->a between->glance them, spiders->for have->a 8->spider legs->always and->has insects->eight never->legsand have->an legs->insect never more than 6.

->six.How many spiders are working->engaged for->in us? ->this work on our behalf ? One authority about->onspiders spiders did->made a census for->of the spiders living->in on the->a grass land->field in southern->the UK. He->south of England, andhe estimated that there were 2.25->more million->than spiders->2,250,000 in one acre. That->, that is to->somethinglike say->6,000,000 there->spiders will->of be->different 6 million spiders->kinds on a football playground->pitch. Spiders spend->are at->busy forat least half time of one->the year eating->in killing insects. We->It can->is hardly->impossible guess->to how->make many->more insects->than they->thewildest eat->guess in->at one->how year->many they kill, but they are hungry animals and ->creatures, not content->contentwith with->only 3->three meals a day. According->It to->has an->been estimated that estimation, the mass->weight of insects->all the in-sects eaten->destroyed by spiders in Britain is->in heavier->one year would be greater than the mass->totalweight of all the country’s->human population->beings in the country

订正

  • Why, you may wonder, should spiders be our friends ?

这句话惭愧是我高中常常是用的作文开头,特别是对于问题解决型的文章而言这个句子就是屠龙宝刀啊!

  • Because they destroy so many insects, and insects include some of the greatest enemies of the human race.

这里的两个and链接的insects其实类似中文的顶针,真是巧妙啊!

  • Insects would make it impossible for us to live in the world; they would devour all our crops and kill our flocks and herds, if it were not for the protectionwe get from insect-eating animals.

这个长句子是我自叹不如的。真是写得太好了,点赞!

  • We owe a lot to the birds and beasts who eat insects but all of them put together kill only a fraction of the number destroyed by spiders.

only a fraction of the number 比我的说法高级多了,瞬间提升句子的形象。

  • Moreover, unlike some of the other insect eaters, spiders never do the least harm to us or our belongings.

这句就是财产这个说法,我用了properiety 这么bug的词汇但是人家真是举重若轻一个belongings就解决了,果然是高大上。

  • Spiders are not insects, as many people think, nor even nearly related to them.

这句话其实在中文中主语转换了一次但是通过使用被动语态很巧妙地从头到尾没有使用多余的主语。这才是从句的用法,直接提升了作文的档次。

  • One can tell the difference almost at a glance for a spider always has eight legs and an insect never more than six.

tell the difference almost at a glance for A is B and C is D

学习这个说法,特别简洁高大。

  • How many spiders are engaged in this work on our behalf ?

这句翻译成中文是多少蜘蛛为我们工作?我写得是work for 但是做着一个 work on our behalf 一下子说出含义同时提高表达的层次。

  • One authority on spiders made a census of the spiders in a grass field in the south of England, and he estimated that there were more than 2,250,000 in one acre, that is something like 6,000,000 spiders of different kinds on a football pitch.

one authority on sth

make an census of

pitch  基本释义

n.球场;程度;音调;推销;投掷;街头商贩摊位;沥青;树脂;松脂

v.投;颠簸;搭帐篷;定调;推销;用沥青覆盖

这里football pitch是足球场的意思。

estimated 和 census也是同义替换, 同时这个句子一气呵成,行云流水,背诵之。

  • It is impossible to make more than the wildest guess at how many they kill, but they are hungry creatures, not content with only three meals a day.

be impossible to make more than the wildest guess at 这个就是只能粗略估计但是了写好出来很唬人的说法啊!

hungry creatures这个说法好,一下子替代了animals。单词变换的妙用。 同时not content with only three meals a day这个佐证说明也很好。

  • It has been estimated that the weight of all the insects destroyed by spiders in Britain in one year would be greater than the total weight of all the human beings in the country.

It has been estimated 这个句式很好,这样不用显得特别主观而是很客观地说出说法。

背诵重点:

Why, you may wonder, should spiders be our friends ? Because they destroy so many insects, and insects include some of the greatest enemies of the human race. Insects would make it impossible for us to live in the world; they woulddevour all our crops and kill our flocks and herds, if it were not for the protectionwe get from insect-eating animals. We owe a lot to the birds and beasts who eatinsects but all of them put together kill only a fraction of the number destroyedby spiders. Moreover, unlike some of the other insect eaters, spiders never dothe least harm to us or our belongings.Spiders are not insects, as many people think, nor even nearly related to them.One can tell the difference almost at a glance for a spider always has eight legsand an insect never more than six.

How many spiders are engaged in this work on our behalf ? One authority onspiders made a census of the spiders in a grass field in the south of England, andhe estimated that there were more than 2,250,000 in one acre, that is somethinglike 6,000,000 spiders of different kinds on a football pitch. Spiders are busy forat least half the year in killing insects. It is impossible to make more than thewildest guess at how many they kill, but they are hungry creatures, not contentwith only three meals a day. It has been estimated that the weight of all the in-sects destroyed by spiders in Britain in one year would be greater than the totalweight of all the human beings in the country

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